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Old September 24, 2021, 17:26   #57
Infinitum
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Quote:
Originally Posted by whispering shadow
A flickering darkness, spreading through the halls. From its midst, you hear faint sounds (voices?) yearning, beckoning.
The (voices?) part looks like it escaped the editing process. I think "[...]faint voices[...]" flows better myself.

EDIT: Pretty sure Carcaroth's poison fangs are analogous to Eitr given how much Tolkien was influenced by Norse mythology.

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